Antigone Cadmus

Mmk. So, the grammar in this piece needs work. A lot, a lot, of work. Some quick grammar tips: --Always capitalise I --Contractions such as "I will" have an apostrophe... ...

Kamas!

Here again, as requested. So. I really do not see much change here. But you --did-- change Gabriel's name. Schweet. You have my comments on the original piece, so this ...

Mesh, could you tell us who is who in the picture? =p YWS is a purty bunch. :D

Done. Keep 'em coming!

Maple syrup (two words, I'm such a rebel!)

Bon soir, Jetpack. :D Here as requested! Please not that I'm super lazy, and I tend not to read the critiques before mine. Repeating of things is often common in ...

Dude. I'm so not triple posting. :wink: I forgot to mention as well, Gabriel works in the stables. I gave the commoner's more common names and the royalty well, more ...

Sorry, my computer screwed up. That's why the review stops in a random place. I'll finish reviewing tonight.

Hey Dakota! Ha, I'm totally entering this conest too. Glad to help out a rival :twisted:! So let's get to the critique, as I ramble far too much in introductions. ...

:D Congrats guys!

Pan's Labyrinth... heard of it, never seen it. :shock: So I totally forgot that kids had mothers. Tee hee. Thanks a lot, Stella. :D

^^ No question :o What is your worst fear?

lolcats (I had to)

you've had the same signature forever! XD 8/10 I do like the inner editor thingy.